Erratic stirrings throwing them into cannibalistic irrational impulses...scorching away any traces of complacency, the crass etiquette folding within their dreary cold noisome blood...
Hungry insecurities are mindlessly fed with filthy drivel.
No it is't the indulgent satiating sinfulness..rather a desperation - tossed unnervingly in the lava of disgusting poignant impuissance...
No it doesn't breathe out any gloriously fierce fire...
the aura is only infected with caustic decay...
Indeed, a throbbing dissonant repulsion on the sensibilities of the spirit....
Not a scheming evil but a creature lost in the acidic abyss of corrosive crassitude...
Such are the things she saw in the deformed eyes of that esurient devil-
forgotten peace...
the growling discord...
the forfeited music of harmony...of "sur"....
The voice of that kind old lady calling to her- she sailed along the comprehensible fluidity only to nestle acquiringly into the meaning of that epithet resonating from her childhood folklore...that she always held immense fascination for...the one devoid of any harmonious melody....the "asur"....
Hungry insecurities are mindlessly fed with filthy drivel.
No it is't the indulgent satiating sinfulness..rather a desperation - tossed unnervingly in the lava of disgusting poignant impuissance...
the aura is only infected with caustic decay...
Indeed, a throbbing dissonant repulsion on the sensibilities of the spirit....
Not a scheming evil but a creature lost in the acidic abyss of corrosive crassitude...
Such are the things she saw in the deformed eyes of that esurient devil-
forgotten peace...
the growling discord...
the forfeited music of harmony...of "sur"....
The voice of that kind old lady calling to her- she sailed along the comprehensible fluidity only to nestle acquiringly into the meaning of that epithet resonating from her childhood folklore...that she always held immense fascination for...the one devoid of any harmonious melody....the "asur"....
Pretty good, but I want to give you an advice I recently learnt from my essays.Do not use imagery so excessively. Although they may sound beautiful, the excessive use of sophisticated word may hinder the reader's ability, due to a lack of understanding, to paint a picture of your thought in his/her mind-thus ruining your actual intent! For instance take "she sailed along the comprehensible fluidity only to nestle acquiringly into the meaning of that epithet resonating from her childhood folklore", for someone who does not know the words comprehensible fluidity, nestle, epithet resonating ....this line is just a pretty play of words without any meaning. Sorry for being so critical, its just that these ideas have helped me in my writing. On a more positive note.....You should also consider poetry,your poetic words will thrive in the libery a poem offers. :)
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